As I think back on my childhood
I realize
nothing ever happened
no emotional event
no catastrophic happening
I had a typical childhood
I've never broken a bone
maybe if I had I would understand
maybe I would join the rest of the kids
but maybe that's not true
maybe because I have never been broken
I know I've always loved having the
spotlight
I loved the attention and the focus
but I've never been one to put myself
out there
In a large place I prefer the quiet
a group of friends
but if there is a possibility of being
laughed at
even the slightest bit
I...
I've always had a fear of spiders
once I remember being with my aunt
and seeing a tarantula
they say curiosity killed the cat
and I guess it did
but the more I think about it
the more I believe I am a spider
staying in the shadows, the sidelines
waiting for my time to shine
and hope not to be crushed.
is it wrong to fear what you're becoming?
Lately I've been feeling lonely
and I know why
I don;t make friends
it just doesn't happen
at the same time the friends I do have
I am slowly
pushing them away
Slowly becoming
alone
with my thoughts as my only companions
and I don't like what I'm thinking.
Sorry if this is me sounding arrogant, but is this meant to match any specific type of poem, or just you writing whatever format you feel like?
As for the actual poem, it's pretty good. I realise you were striving for a poem with deep themes as opposed to helping you paint an image, and the themes you do present all work well.
I enjoy the fact that you use simple themes and then develop them into deeper themes, such as an example, the spider verse. I'll be honest, when I first read the verse. I just thought "Of all things, he talks about a fear of spiders?" and then finished off the the verse and was nodding my head over how 'intelligent' (for a lack of better term) and creative it was (I've never read an analogy of someone treating themselves as a spider).
*applause*
*blush* Well, my teacher said we were trying to write catalog poems, and to practice repetition. Thank you though for reviewing it. But now the homework assignment is to write a passion poem and oh god that is gonna be brutal.
As for the actual poem, it's pretty good. I realise you were striving for a poem with deep themes as opposed to helping you paint an image, and the themes you do present all work well.
I enjoy the fact that you use simple themes and then develop them into deeper themes, such as an example, the spider verse. I'll be honest, when I first read the verse. I just thought "Of all things, he talks about a fear of spiders?" and then finished off the the verse and was nodding my head over how 'intelligent' (for a lack of better term) and creative it was (I've never read an analogy of someone treating themselves as a spider).
*applause*
I'm no expert on poetry, but this was nice to read.
Why thank you kind sir.